Opal's

Paige i love the fact that you are so passionate about this.
But i think that you might need a little more information on this as well.
there was a few spelling mistake in your writing like "a alittle".
But it looks fine after that.
I am still interested in why you picked this topic.

DOOFY

You made a few spelling mistakes like "a alittle" from your top paragraph. But other than that it looks good.

Camerons Response

It looks like your very interested in your topic. Maybe get some more info but other than that everything looks good. This was a very interesting topic to research.